1) The pitch.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=d_VhyJ8imwo
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch.
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch.
For the most part I think that the feedback I got from my last pitch did not elaborate on many ways I could improve. What I did want to build upon that I did previously was the explanation for some of the features and product variety. I figured that including a new feature would help to entice would be customers into coming through our store.
3) What did you change, based on the feedback?
I tried to speak a bit more directly to the camera, and I also tried to come up with something new to my grocery store and include it in the pitch. I felt that I could have done better overall on my delivery and made it less metered, but I feel that the content of my message was clear and informational.
Hi Nicholas, your elevator pitch is great! Also, great job improving parts of your speech despite the fact you only received positive feedback. I think including the new feature definitely helped. Overall, good job!
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ReplyDeleteI really liked how you wrote out the information that you presented in your elevator pitch. It makes it looked very organized, informative and professional. I think that you did a good job on speaking more directly to the camera and the delivery was also great. Overall I think you do a good job on your pitch from the information you provide to how you present it. Good job.
Hi Nicholas. I had a similar problem in which people did not give feedback that elaborated on ways my elevator pitch could improve. I think that you speak well, however, you should stand next time. When you sit down, it is not as dynamic of a presence as when you are standing. I do like how you included a product variety section of your pitch.
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